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    Aoa . I am new in forum . I will require assistance . thanks

    Plz check my essay intro and comment.
    Title: gender discrimination against women in Pakista .

    Thesis statement: the prevailing socioeconomic disparities coupled with stereotype political conception has made gender discrimination a hard hit reality with far-reaching consequences , despite various declarations and steps, which need serious measures.

    Introduction:

    The concept of gender discrimination against women refers to deprivation of women against from their due rights and privileges as compared to men counterparts of the society. This concept also widely prevails in Pakistan. Women in Pakistan are fallen prey of disparity at political social and economic fronts . they lack political and economic participation. In addition, social barriers have widened the gap . various factors I.e feudalistic mind set , patriarchy in society , religious and cultural barriers are responsible for this unfortunate reality which has negative impact on economic growth, literacy, social evolution and image building of the country. However, by empowerment of women in all walks of life and projection of women friendly projects, the gulf of discrimination can be narrowed down . yet , the prevailing socioeconomic disparities coupled with stereotypes political conceptions has made gender discrimination against women in Pakistan a hard hit reality with far-reaching consequences despite various declarations and steps , which need serious counter measures.

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    You are welcome in this forum.

    Try to compose simple, short and compact sentences. Simplify your expression as much as you can.

    Your thesis statement can be rephrased as:

    The prevailing socioeconomic disparities between men and women coupled with commonly-held traditional political notions have made gender discrimination an awful reality. Despite various declarations and steps, there persists an unjust gulf between men and women with far-reaching consequences for the state and society.

    Introduction

    The concept of gender discrimination refers to discrimination on the basis of a person's gender or sex which generally affects girls and women. The gender discrimination widely prevails in Pakistan which deprives women from their due rights and privileges as compared to their male counterparts in the society. Women in Pakistan more often fall prey to gender disparity at various political, social and economic levels. They lack opportunities to participate in political and economic activities. In addition, many social barriers have further widened the gap. Various factors like feudalistic mindset and patriarchy hamper women from utilizing their potential which has negatively impacted the country’s economy, education, and image. The panacea lies in narrowing down the gulf of discrimination, between males and females, by empowering women in all walks of life and initiating women-friendly projects. Though there have been some serious and concerted efforts to elevate the status of women in the society, yet women continue to experience systemic gender subordination. The prevailing socioeconomic disparities between men and women coupled with commonly-held traditional political notions have made gender discrimination an awful reality. Despite various declarations and steps, there persists an unjust gulf between men and women with far-reaching consequences for the state and society.


    Hope it will help you.
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    i am greatly thankful for your fruitful gudiance . hope for your assistance in future. thanks a lot

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    The prevailing socioeconomic disparities between men and women coupled with commonly-held traditional political notions have made gender discrimination an awful reality. Despite various declarations and steps, there persists an unjust gulf between men and women with far-reaching consequences for the state and society.
    This thesis statement looks impressive.

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    Aoa kindly analyze my intro with precious comments. Thanks

    Topic : world as a global village: Learning to live together


    Thesis statement:
    the phenomenon of globalization and technological advancement has made the world a global village , where projection of peaceful coexistence is eminent.


    Intro.

    The phenomenon of globalization and technological advancement has made the world a global village, where projection of peaceful coexistence is eminent. In this modern era of science and technology people living in different corners of the world can communicate to one another within seconds. Similarly, with the avedent of internet and high-tech devices the inter-state connectivity has got extraordinary progress and theoretical distance among individuals have shrinked. Furthermore, the liberalization of social, political and economic cannons and concepts have formed almost a uniform concensus of opinion across the globe . in addition, free flow of information via mass media and world public opinion has contributed to the global integration. The agenda of collective security and climate has further brougt the world community at a common point. However, various factors like terrorism , arms race , inter-state rivalries are hurdels in the way of peaceful coexistence. Nevertheless, through effective measures like solving inter-state rivalries and disputes the concept of living together in a global village can be ensured .

 

 

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